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My canty cat had said to me
(while sitting on my wooden desk
where I was writing a burlesque)
If only you could clearly see
the many colours of my flea,
for then you'd know without a doubt-
its splendid look will knock you out.
I stared at her with growing awe,
she smiled, then offered her left paw -
the flea, I fear it was a scout!
OK, here is it! I changed especially line 2 and 3 several times, so I'm glad to hear what you think. I was not sure about that "fonder" of the last line, for till now I only knew it as "to be fond of" , but then I found out, that it can be used as an adjective in its own right. Or what word I should choose for the title: sapience, sapiency, sagacity, wit?
A cats sapience
My lovely cat once said to me
(while sitting on my wooden desk
where I was writing a burlesque):
If you could only clearly see
the many colours of my flea
then you too would surely ponder
to purchase such a noble wonder.
I looked at her with growing awe,
so she put smiling her left paw
onto my arm. Who could be fonder?
My canty cat had said to me
(while sitting on my wooden desk
where I was writing a burlesque)
If only you could clearly see
the many colours of my flea,
for then you'd know without a doubt-
its splendid look will knock you out.
I stared at her with growing awe,
she smiled, then offered her left paw -
the flea, I fear it was a scout!
OK, here is it! I changed especially line 2 and 3 several times, so I'm glad to hear what you think. I was not sure about that "fonder" of the last line, for till now I only knew it as "to be fond of" , but then I found out, that it can be used as an adjective in its own right. Or what word I should choose for the title: sapience, sapiency, sagacity, wit?
A cats sapience
My lovely cat once said to me
(while sitting on my wooden desk
where I was writing a burlesque):
If you could only clearly see
the many colours of my flea
then you too would surely ponder
to purchase such a noble wonder.
I looked at her with growing awe,
so she put smiling her left paw
onto my arm. Who could be fonder?
