There's really a lovely tone and sense here, Octogenarian, which overall, makes for a pleasant and enjoyable read. Well done! There's a magical aspect to this which relates very easily to dawn (for me), and which works very well for me. I only see a few minor glitches here.

S3 L5 and S5 L5 -- you've misused "its" In both cases, it appears you're looking for the possesive pronoun (its), but you've got the contraction instead. For a discussion on the topic of possessive pronouns, look here.

I also think proper punctuation would enhance the read incredibly, (making it far easier to follow the train of thought), but that may be personal preference. I'd also say that the symbolism/imagery of S3 is somewhat lost on me and doesn't work -- perhaps a personal thing. It could be lack of understanding, but you may want to consider imagery/thoughts that are more universal.

Overall, an enjoyable and peaceful read. I hope you find something of use in my comments :)
Anyone can write of beauty -- of life, friendship, love everlasting -- but it is those rare, brave souls who dare to live their words that are the true poets of the universe. That is where true beauty lies. ~JaML