Very good crits! I'll do some delving through thesauruses and dictionaries to find that special... as the French say, "I don't know what." Gosh, I love the French. Oops! I digress. Yea, this one has been lingering in the rapids riverbed for long enough. I have been sonneteering for about a year now with about 80 in the coffers, and it is time to start the comprehensive revision process starting with this one. I have gathered many good crits on a couple more in here, and on that WAY OTT one for the soldiers (posted over in ye ol' WW); so the revision process will be time consuming- but I have enough experience and gathered enough tools and distance to DIG IN.

Thanks girl!
B

Oh, and thanks SS and any other crits- I know it is time consuming to crit, but it's fun too!!!
B
gesundheit!
(no, not for sneezing)