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You are awesome! I am ALWAYS missing little iambs here and there... alseep at the switch I guess
Ahhhh details, details. (and I think I cut and pasted an older version... a clumbsy cop-out if you will allow me it
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L1: not that they blow away something; rather that they are the objects that blow themselves. This one is (I hope with a minimum of interpretation) a sarcastic metaphor for politicians and the political process (especially propaganda). The gusts being ("literally") the wind expelled from a mouth.
So, the gusts leave the orators mouth, swing the signs that advertise the same old same old empty junk, and kick up dust on empty streets (funny). We are too busy to be propagandized because we are involved in "suckling at the teat" of rampant capitalism... you know, cheating and stealing and exploiting in a hierarchical (classist, not classicist
) manner.
Now, we "could" forgo this mess. The thing about "could" is the implied "but" right? There is another shoe to drop, and that is the "will we" shoe. You are right, I do not drop that shoe, and it is intentional.
I appreciate your suggestions regarding footnotes and long words... I really like long, old, 50-cent words... REALLY REALLY
Perhaps the Atlantic has something to do with my word usage too... we do things a bit cooky out here in the colonies.
BUT! You have an excellent suggestion in "bind" (again, I have to look at my latest revision- I can't be that much of a blockhead, no?) Plus, it sets up a nice assonance with "vines"
(also, I meant to follow up on your correct objection to the use of "opines)
We're vs. We've: You are right, a subtle but important distinction there.
We're = another knock at "will's" expense;
We've = well, at least it leaves the door ajar, ya know what I'm saying?
whom is one of those words that has fallen from usage- but, I wanted to use it. Let me see... Here we go:
CLICK HERE
for the expanded discussion of below:
"Who is used for a grammatical subject, where a nominative pronoun such as I or he would be appropriate, and whom is used as the object of a verb or preposition."
Now I guess my argument is that "...the class subordinates..." is the object; but there is a clause: "...queue around the block." To choose the correct who/whom, one must take into account the clause (which I did not). So, taking the clause into account you are correct what "who" is the appropriate word. THANKS! (I need to brush up on grammar rules).
Nice to get an outside opinion as to content. It seems as though I am clutchin' at straws a bit- oh well.
By the way, do you hve any rhyming/metrical stuff you want to post? I would like to participate in the 2-reply rule, but it is tough without some stuff to look through (same applies in white water- I am sifting through stuff several months old... and fairly well gone over, aaand, well *he grins sheepishly* I am not the biggest fan of free verse.)
egads!
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