Hmmm... yes, I have been working on this one for a while. It is an earlier attempt, so it needs a lot of attention. I will weigh your critique heavily, and see if I can add more of a transition:

"...perhaps the abruptness of this change is what is throwing me."

As you point out, it may be too much of a volta, as it were...


As for cavalier and dominate, I was working from the definition of cavalier: "given to haughty disregard of others." In this way, I do not read a shift exactly, but a modifier of that way one dominates. Almost "hubris" in a way...



wind's winds and wind's (no, I have not been eating beans!!!)
I meant the contraction of "wind is"- I see your point that "winds" would work equally as well. I will try it out.

Thanks for the awesome ideas! Revision is forthcoming! (Can't wait to read some more of your stuff too- let's get this board rollin'!)
egads!