Hi CV

This is the first Espinela I have read and I've really enjoyed it! There are so many forms I have not got round to trying. You have done well with revision and I can see the improvements.
Just a few thoughts ~

My canty cat had said to me

I prefered it when you started
My canty cat once said to me
or for a complete change you could say
My canty cat announced to me


(while sitting on my wooden desk
where I was writing a burlesque)
If only you could clearly see
the many colours of my flea,
for then you'd know without a doubt-
its splendid look will knock you out.

Perhaps ~
you'd recognize without a doubt
a splendid look to knock you out


I stared at her with growing awe,
she smiled, then offered her left paw -
the flea, I fear it was a scout!


Just my thoughts -- not necessarily right for you.

I really love this one -- must try the form myself.

Snow