Hi Boardflak,

this is an excellent conceit. Your well chosen and well executed metaphor is not only beautiful but thought provoking.

With a mooning grace
she propagates chaos
upon the face the dreaming deep.
Even in ebbing sighs he still breathes in time
with the pace of her eventide.
Her thoughts are ever flowing through his mind
wavering in a soft and sequential embrace.

I replied more or less in kind because your words are inspiring.
But you said it all better.
Your verse is eminently poetic... and put just so upon the page.
I'm glad I read this one and lingered for a while to think about it. Thank you.